Jared, I enjoyed your digital story. It was a lot different than the other stories, which made it very catchy! Your trip is a memory that you will cherish forever! It made me think about the trips I took in my youth, and the memories I took from them. The best thing about your digital story is your narration! You tell the story with great expression and it keeps the audience tuned in. Wonderful story, don’t change anything! Also, always remember the things you learned on that trip because those are wonderful memories!
That's one darn good rough draft!! I like how it evolved and had a 'deeper meaning' as the story went on. I would add some music and a few more pic and/or transitions. You are a great story teller and it seems like you carefully wrote out what you were going to say- which is the best thing about your digital story. I can't exactly relate to this story well so I would say this story made me think about… funny, old men… I guess more specifically a book I read called, "Shit My Dad Says"
Your digital story made me think about my own grandfather and father and their lessons. One thing you might think about changing is nothing, it's great! The best thing about your digital story is how personable it is and how descriptive you are about your family.
Your story made me think about my life with my grandpa and all the adventures we went on. I would consider adding some music to your story. The best thing I liked was you made it very personable and connecting to anyone who can see it.
Your digital story made me think about the trips I would take with my dad, traveling in a car when I was a kid is so different than today, I could jump all over the back seat and lay down and watch the stars out the window when we would drive at night.
One thing you might think about changing is maybe adding in some different pictures at the end it seem like you reapeated several of them.
The best thing about your digital story is they way you developed the story and the obvious respect you have for your father and grandfather.
Excellent story. It made me think about the the travels that I have made. I wouldn't change much at all. The best thing is that you recall much about a story from so long ago that changed you forever.
Jared, I enjoyed your digital story. It was a lot different than the other stories, which made it very catchy! Your trip is a memory that you will cherish forever! It made me think about the trips I took in my youth, and the memories I took from them. The best thing about your digital story is your narration! You tell the story with great expression and it keeps the audience tuned in. Wonderful story, don’t change anything! Also, always remember the things you learned on that trip because those are wonderful memories!
ReplyDeleteThat's one darn good rough draft!! I like how it evolved and had a 'deeper meaning' as the story went on. I would add some music and a few more pic and/or transitions. You are a great story teller and it seems like you carefully wrote out what you were going to say- which is the best thing about your digital story. I can't exactly relate to this story well so I would say this story made me think about… funny, old men… I guess more specifically a book I read called, "Shit My Dad Says"
ReplyDeleteYour digital story made me think about my own grandfather and father and their lessons. One thing you might think about changing is nothing, it's great! The best thing about your digital story is how personable it is and how descriptive you are about your family.
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ReplyDeleteHow much I love my dad and miss my papaw.
One thing you might think about changing is....
Adding music.
The best thing about your digital story is....
Your speaking voice is great!
Your story made me think about my life with my grandpa and all the adventures we went on.
ReplyDeleteI would consider adding some music to your story.
The best thing I liked was you made it very personable and connecting to anyone who can see it.
Your digital story made me think about the trips I would take with my dad, traveling in a car when I was a kid is so different than today, I could jump all over the back seat and lay down and watch the stars out the window when we would drive at night.
ReplyDeleteOne thing you might think about changing is maybe adding in some different pictures at the end it seem like you reapeated several of them.
The best thing about your digital story is they way you developed the story and the obvious respect you have for your father and grandfather.
Excellent story. It made me think about the the travels that I have made. I wouldn't change much at all. The best thing is that you recall much about a story from so long ago that changed you forever.
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